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It’s ok to make mistakes as long as you learn from them. Constant practice is useless if you keep on repeating the same errors. This is extremely crucial in writing like spelling and grammar errors. The most common mistakes that people make are the subjectverb agreement, tense consistency and prepositions. Analyze your mistakes and review them.
30 DAYS TO A BETTER IELTS WRITING MIRACEL JUANTA 30 DAYS TO A BETTER IELTS WRITING MIRACEL JUANTA This file was generated by an automated blog to book conversion system Its use is governed by the licensing terms of the original content hosted at teachersodyssey.blogspot.com Powered by Pothi.com http://pothi.com Contents THE 10 BEST BOOKS IN IELTS EVER RESOURCES FOR IELTS TAKERS HABITS OF HIGHLY INEFFECTIVE IELTS TAKERS IELTS WRITING MAKEOVER #1 IELTS WRITING MAKEOVER #2 10 IELTS WRITING MAKEOVER #3 14 IELTS WRITING MAKEOVER #4 18 IELTS WRITING MAKEOVER #5 21 IELTS WRITING MAKEOVER #6 25 IELTS WRITING MAKEOVER #7 28 IELTS WRITING MAKEOVER #8 32 IELTS WRITING MAKEOVER #9 35 IELTS WRITING MAKEOVER #10 38 IELTS WRITING MAKEOVER #11 41 IELTS WRITING MAKEOVER #12 45 IELTS WRITING MAKEOVER #13 48 IELTS WRITING MAKEOVER #14 51 IELTS WRITING MAKEOVER #15 54 IELTS WRITING MAKEOVER #16 57 IELTS WRITING MAKEOVER #17 60 IELTS WRITING MAKEOVER #18 64 IELTS WRITING MAKEOVER #19 67 IELTS WRITING MAKEOVER #20 70 IELTS WRITING MAKEOVER #21 73 IELTS WRITING MAKEOVER #22 76 IELTS WRITING MAKEOVER #23 79 IELTS WRITING MAKEOVER #24 83 IELTS WRITING MAKEOVER #25 86 IELTS WRITING MAKEOVER #26 89 IELTS WRITING MAKEOVER #27 92 IELTS WRITING MAKEOVER #28 95 IELTS WRITING MAKEOVER #29 99 IELTS WRITING MAKEOVER #30 102 IELTS WRITING MAKEOVER #31 105 IELTS WRITING MAKEOVER #32 108 IELTS WRITING MAKEOVER #33 111 IELTS WRITING MAKEOVER #34 114 IELTS WRITING MAKEOVER #35 118 IELTS WRITING MAKEOVER #37 121 IELTS WRITING MAKEOVER #36 124 IELTS WRITING MAKEOVER #38 127 IELTS WRITING MAKEOVER #39 130 IELTS WRITING MAKEOVER #40 133 IELTS WRITING MAKEOVER #41 136 IELTS WRITING MAKEOVER #41 139 IELTS WRITING MAKEOVER #42 142 IELTS Writing Makeover #43 145 IELTS Writing Makeover #44 148 IELTS WRITING MAKEOVER #45 151 IELTS WRITING MAKEOVER #46 153 IELTS WRITING MAKEOVER #47 156 IELTS WRITING MAKEOVER #48 159 IELTS WRITING MAKEOVER #49 162 IELTS WRITING MAKEOVER #50 165 IELTS WRITING MAKEOVER # 51 168 IELTS WRITING MAKEOVER #52 171 IELTS WRITING MAKEOVER #53 174 IELTS WRITING MAKEOVER #54 178 IELTS WRITING MAKEOVER #55 181 IELTS WRITING MAKEOVER #56 185 IELTS WRITING MAKEOVER #57 188 IELTS WRITING MAKEOVER #58 191 IELTS WRITING MAKEOVER #59 194 IELTS WRITING MAKEOVER #60 198 IELTS WRITING MAKEOVER #61 202 IELTS WRITING MAKEOVER #64 205 IELTS WRITING MAKEOVER #63 208 IELTS WRITING MAKEOVER #62 211 IELTS WRITING MAKEOVER #62 215 IELTS WRITING MAKEOVER #65 218 IELTS WRITING MAKEOVER #68 221 IELTS WRITING MAKEOVER #67 224 IELTS WRITING MAKEOVER #66 227 IELTS WRITING MAKEOVER #69 230 THE 10 BEST BOOKS IN IELTS EVER What are the best books for IELTS? I have summarized some of the books that I use in teaching IELTS Amazon has great deals on both new and used IELTS books Go now and avail of discounts 1.Barron's IELTS with Audio CD: International English Language Testing System 2.Kaplan IELTS 2009 3.Target Band 7: How to Maximize Your Score (IELTS Academic Module) 4.Cambridge IELTS Student's Book with Answers: Examination Papers from University of Cambridge ESOL Examinations (Cambridge Books for Cambridge Exams) 5.Cambridge IELTS Student's Book with answers: Examination papers from University of Cambridge ESOL Examinations (Cambridge Books for Cambridge Exams) 6.Common Mistakes at IELTS Advanced: And How to Avoid Them 7.Cambridge Grammar for IELTS Student's Book with Answers and Audio CD (Cambridge Grammar for First Certificate, IELTS, PET) 8.Check Your English Vocabulary for IELTS: All you need to pass your exams (Vocabulary Workbook) 9.Cambridge Vocabulary for IELTS with answers and Audio CD (Cambridge Vocabulary for Exams) 10.New Insight into IELTS Student's Book with Answers Surf Amazon now and get your target IELTS band score! :) If you have other recommendations, feel free to post your comments Prevention of diseases is the ultimate solution to sparing the health and money of any nation.Educating school-age children about the consequences of living an unhealthy lifestyle may have a postive impact on their prospective health.Advertisement in the different media should encourage young adults to spending their leisure time in sport rather than, sitting infront of the screen most of the day Curing serious and long term diseases,which usually result from sedentary and unhealthy life style,may be a long and frustrating journey.Most of the budget of the national health service usually goes to the expensive treatments ,which could have been avoided by proper awareness Prevention of diseases will have a very postive effect on the whole society.It is not limitted to the financial savings but rather to the economical value on the whole society,where people who are seriously ill receive benefits for them and their families.Hence,creating a generation who is more consuming than producing.It is certainly worth ,supporting the preventative measures by all means 4-POINT CRITIQUE TASK ACHIEVEMENT You gave a good introduction and conclusion where you made clear your stand However, the supporting details are weak which not prove why government should spend more on prevention 219 LEXICAL RESOURCE You demonstrated good range of vocabulary: obesity, eradicate, sedentary, consuming COHERENCE AND COHESION There are a few transition words found: but, hence, for example The paragraphs are generally organized but needs more coherence Some examples are illogical GRAMMATICAL RANGE AND ACCURACY There are some spelling errors: postive, limitted There are some errors in punctuation particularly unnecessary commas For a free IELTS makeover, email me at msjuanta@yahoo.com 220 IELTS WRITING MAKEOVER #68 The following essay was written by Yusuf and he discusses about the changes in the position of women over the years The position of women in society has changed markedly in the last twenty years Many of the problems young people now experience, such as juvenile delinquency, arise from the fact that many married women now work and are not at home to care for their children In recent times,women have been facing increased challenges in all fields.They are not only criticized at work,but also at home.They have been accused of being fully responsible for the prospective behaviour of their own children.This does not only apply to single parent mothers,but also to families with both parents I tend to disagree that all working mothers can not take care of their children Parenthood should not be the sole responsibility of one parent only,but unfortunately mums are usually to be blamed whenever their offsprings fall in trouble There are certain jobs, which are dominated by women due to their motherly caring nature as in teaching,nursing or even social wokers.A lot of them are a real inspiration to the young generation,so it is totally unfair to contribute mother's work to the negativity which may be found in young adults 221 Mothers who are working ,may not have other alternatives to earning money especially in single parent families.Also,the work experience as well as the sociable skills accomplished will certainly have a postive impact on the self esteem of such females who can thus serve as better mums I strongly believe that the quality of time spent with the children is much more valuable than the quantity itself.A lot of housewives may leave their kids infront of the TV ,the computers or videogames.Hence they are passively contributing in bringing them up On the other hand,many of the female full timers or part timers are intelligent enough to manage and plan their time efficiently.Believing in the significant value of the limited hours they spend with their sons and daughters,will definitely push them to plan many events in advance and to make the best of it.So,it is not unusual to find them sharing their children or even teens in reading or even playing outdoor Consequently,the length of time spent by women at home could never be the only factor considered to predict the juvenile sociable behaviour.The amount of attention these youngsters are getting is absolutely more influencing on both the short and the long terms.In other words ,a dedicated mother could be a working mother or a housewife Word count: 354 4-POINT CRITIQUE 222 TASK ACHIEVEMENT You were able to give strong arguments supporting the position of women, however, your word count is 354 Reduce the number of words between 250-265 words LEXICAL RESOURCE Vocabulary is varied: dominated, juvenile, passively, alternatives COHERENCE AND COHESION There are a number of transition words used: consequently, hence, so, also, but Organization needs work as there are too many paragraphs Stick to only paragraphs GRAMMATICAL RANGE AND ACCURACY There are some spelling errors: postive, wokers For a free makeover, email me at msjuanta@yahoo.com 223 IELTS WRITING MAKEOVER #67 The following essay was written by Ajith He talks about the future of the DVD market A lot of films are now strictly made for the DVD market and soon we will be able to download films directly from the internet Answer: A film which combines both audio and video to express a story is frequently used by the people for recreation They prefer to watch movies as a habit or a hobby As the DVD market has taken major changes recently, they are lucky to buy a film which is encoded in a DVD to fulfill their entertaining needs However, the technical development which assists to create an immense number of films in a short period can be considered as the main reason for this availability The production of cartoon films with good standard and high quality is the best example which extensively illustrates the effect of technology towards the film making On one hand, this entails in many opportunities for the people to enjoy various films after a good selection as they are inexpensive and rampant This situation enables them to watch a movie flexibly at home in any convenient time rather than going to a cinema which may be obsolete due to mal-maintenance 224 On the other hand, the consequences may be undesirable because children who are not deserve to watch films which are labeled as "Adults Only" will practice to see them using the computers as a solution for the oppose of their guardians Furthermore It decreases the number of the people who go to the cinema resulting a huge break down in the cinema industry However in the near future there will be a facility to download the movies via internet as our wish because even now we can see a real time film using a high speed internet connection It will solve the problematic situations which people have to face when they want to see original film with better sound and obvious scenes This will result in a new arising in the film production industry 4-POINT CRITIQUE TASK ACHIEVEMENT You were able to give good arguments to support your position You provided sufficient supporting details to expand your views LEXICAL RESOURCE Vocabulary is varied: consequences, facility, high speed internet connection, availability COHERENCE AND COHESION Essay structure is organized and clear with the use of appropriate transition words: on one hand, however, furthermore, on the other 225 hand GRAMMATICAL RANGE AND ACCURACY There are some grammar errors: "who are not deserve", "a new arising", "for the oppose of their guardians" and "mal-maintenance" For a free makeover, email me at msjuanta@yahoo.com 226 IELTS WRITING MAKEOVER #66 The following essay was written by Melorin He discusses about freedom of expression Question: creative artists should always be given the freedom to express their own ideas(in words, pictures,music or film) in whichever way they wish.There should be no government restrictions on what they In some countries like Iran government decides about the subjects that artists should work on However, this is the right of the artists to create their masterpiece as it is, and without any kind of censorship From my point of view freedom must be returned to the society of artists They should express their feelings by the means of their gifted skills If someone forces them to create their crafts in a particular subject,their artistic production will not be natural and meaningful anymore For example political issues must not be forbidden in movies, stories, poetry, cartoons, and so on Nude sculptures and paintings also should not be banned by political organizations.As they all show the feelings and art of a nation or at least a group of people Musical items must be free as well.the country's policy must not prohibit playing them due to religious reasons Since music is one of the most delightful ways of sharing inner potentials with listeners Both listeners and producers of the music share their feelings by 227 playing it One plays the instruments and the other plays the button One speaks the notes language and the other speaks the body language, I mean dance To conclude, all aspects of art should be allowed to exist in any subject and by any tools that their creator wishes Thus people will feel free to share their opinions and open the window of their hearts to public For instance if someone feels like criticizing the politics by drawing cartoons, they should not take him to jail.This can also be useful for improving the rules and policy if the politicians care about their ideas in order to develop 4-POINT CRITIQUE TASK ACHIEVEMENT You only gave one main reason why creative expression should be encouraged The 3rd and 4th paragraph started with examples instead of topic sentences LEXICAL RESOURCE Some vocabulary words are repetitive: play, feel, free There are some inappropriate word choice: musical items COHERENCE AND COHESION There are a number of transition words used: however, for example, to conclude, thus, for instance Essay is generally organized with the use of the 5-paragraph format 228 GRAMMATICAL RANGE AND ACCURACY There are some grammatical errors: "in some countries like Iran government decides" and missing commas For a free makeover, email me at msjuanta@yahoo.com 229 IELTS WRITING MAKEOVER #69 The following essay is from Sujitra from Thailand The essay discusses the influence of advertising on higher sales of consumer products Topic : Today, the high sales of popular consumer goods reflect the power of advertising and not the real needs of the society in which they are sold To what extent you agree or disagree? Nowadays, some people believe advertising have much more impact to consumer behavior Particularly, it persuades them to buy luxuries goods that are not necessary for their life However, others think the advertising is not the main factor which makes people consume popular consumer goods In this essay, I discuss both of view, although I am also aware that every one would agree with this opinion On the one hand, some people think TV advertising has not much effect for buyers This is because people in this age receive much information which makes them have enough analytical thinking Consequently, they can use it to distinguish advantages or disadvantages results Apparently, when people watch TV which is promoting consumer goods, they will think twice and check details of products such as quality, price or durability before deciding to buy 230 On the other hand, others believe advertising have much more power that can convince people to purchase goods even it is not necessary for their life In my opinion, the main purpose of advertisement is sailing, so it will try every way which make people pay money to buy them It appears that some people use the brand name bag which is very expensive especially its function is not different from an ordinary bag However, the advertising is successful to convince consumers even some people will be a debtor In conclusion, in my opinion, people should realize that while we are buying luxuries, there are many people have not money to buy foods for supporting their life Moreover, the goods which is not response our real needs, they will be the waste that makes pollution for our world in the future 4-POINT CRITIQUE TASK ACHIEVEMENT You discussed both views about the power of advertising's influence on high sales of consumer goods However, the conclusion is illogical and doesn't reflect the main points in your body LEXICAL RESOURCE There are some words which are redundant e.g pay money to buy them There are also some words which are wrongly used: sailing COHERENCE AND COHESION 231 You've made use of transition words such as “however”, “on one hand”, “on the other hand”, “in conclusion” Paragraphs are generally organized but add one more paragraph to make use of the 5-paragraph format GRAMMATICAL RANGE AND ACCURACY There are some awkward sentences and subject-verb errors which need revision: there are many people have not money to buy foods for supporting their life; the goods which is not response our real needs For a free makeover, email me at msjuanta@yahoo.com 232 ... 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